托福写作:A factory in your community


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Topic:A factory in your community

A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.

参考分析:

先讨论“假设工厂真的落成了,而带来的好处和坏处”,而后发表看法。

好处:

1.直接增加了就业机会(到工厂去上班);间接增加了就业机会(会有很多服务业,比如饭店、商店、超市等等跟着开业);

2.如果工厂规模足够大,物流规模也足够大,那么将最终成为交通改善的起点;

3.大的工厂可以缴纳很多税,对地方财政有好处,进而促进社区的繁荣;

坏处:

4.带来各种污染,比如,噪音、废气、污水等等;

5.工厂不一定会赢利。

范文:

先说明优势和劣势,让后说同意建一个工厂:

(1)工厂能够吸收附近很多人进行就业,对地方的经济有很大的贡献;

(2)建立工厂能够促使附近其他的商业发展,例如小商店,药店等等,这可以大大方便附近的居民;

(3)建造工厂,赢利后,就可以向当地政府贡献税收,政府可以利用这些钱改善社区的服务。

As the company has announced to build a factory right here in our community, I am so eager to(非常迫切)say a few words toward this issue. I really think that if the plan is carried out in the near feature finally, there will be much more disadvantages than advantages to be brought to the quality life of our social community.(作者给出了否定的观点,通过上下文我们感受到作者的心情时比较急切的)

Of course, during these years' high unemployment rate(高失业率), introducing of such a large factory will consume unemployed workforce in some respects(在某些方面). A family may increase their income by taking account of(考虑到)its new employed father during or after the construction of the factory, local government can increase its tax income and retail dealers(零售商)of our community may sell a little more because of the increasing of population that may be the result of the new build factory. However, all these benefits may seem to be so small when compared with all those disadvantages the new build factory may lead to.

The most hateful thing is that you may notable to smell the fresh air in the sunny Sunday mornings because this huge industrial monster will probably deliver a great deal of waste fume(烟)and waste materials(废料)every day, far more than the amount you can imagine. And far more disappointed than this, those rumbling(隆隆不息的,形容工厂), non-stopping stream lines in the factory can make noises loud enough to bereave people of our tranquil town out of sweat dreams.(请关注本段中量词的用法,如the amount)

And you will no doubt feel uncomfortable to drive your family to the camping place because maybe the establishment(确立)of the new factory will bring more than 20% increases in population as well 30% increases in using of private cars and trucks, imaging how could it be in the street in rush hours, or even in the holidays. So, you can see clearly that increasing in population is not always good news for a small community like ours.(工厂会增加人口,社区会变得日益拥挤)

Basic food prices may probably rise and public transportation will burden more, which usually means poor services, public schools and community facilities which once made us feel so convenient living in this small town may get harder and harder to be attended or utilized as the increasing of population, upon all those disadvantages, why should we give applauses to the announcement of the company? (文章写到的不利方面还是很全面的,不过个人认为可以展开得更细一些。结尾反问句,很新颖。)

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