The diagrams show statistic information regarding the ages of the habitants of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and also a estimative for 2050.
We can see that in 2000 the majority of people in Yemen was between 0 and 14 years old, whith 50.1%, whereas in Italy most of the population was between 15-59 years old (61.6%), in the same year. On the other hand, just 3.6% of people in the former country was 60 years old or more in 2000, while in the latter country this figure is represented with 24.1%.
The projections for 2050 show that the number of people with 15-59 years and 60 years or more will increase in Yemen, reaching 57.3% and 5.7% respectively. In contrast, in Italy, the population with 15-59 years will decrease to 46.2%, while people with 60 years or more will grow to 42.3%.
Overall, it is possible to see that there is an upward trend on the rates of people with 60 years or more in both countries.
(得分原因)The answer addresses the task, “reporting sufficient details”(信息比较全面) for the reader to be “accurately informed”(信息精确)
(失分原因)even though in each chart one element is “implied”(暗示) “rather than overtly stated”(没有清晰描绘). (如范文第2段中没有清晰说明2000年也门15-59岁人口的比重以及意大利0到14岁的人口比重;再比如范文第3段中没有清晰说明两个国家2050年0到14岁的人口比重)。
(得分原因) “Clear comparisons”(清晰的信息比较) are drawn between the two countries. An overview is given(总趋势描绘),
(失分原因) although focusing on only one age group reduces its clarity. (最后一段只总结了两个国家60岁以上的人口的改变而忽视了别的两个年龄段的总趋势描绘)。
(得分原因)The information is well organised and a range of linking devices used, e.g. whereas; the latter country.
We can see that in 2000 the majority of people in Yemen was between 0 and 14 years old, with 50.1%, whereas in Italy most of the population was between 15-59 years old (61.6%), in the same year. On the other hand, just 3.6% of people in the former country was 60 years old or more in 2000, while in the latter country, this figure is represented with 24.1%.
(得分原因)”Vocabulary is adequate”(词汇量和词汇使用精确度足够) for the task and “generally accurate”(基本精确),
(失分原因)though attempt to use less common words are less successful. A few errors occur in word formation e.g. statistic (statistical); estimative(estimate), but they “do not affect understanding”(有错误可是不影响理解).
(得分原因)Simple and complex sentence forms are produced with few grammatical errors,
(失分原因)but the range of structures is rather restricted(句式缺少多样性)
(1) working 和sleeping最多，可是一个增多，一个削减
(2) 相同削减的是going out with friends or families
(3) 相反花在relaxing at home和traveling to work的时刻都有不同程度的增加。
(4) 只有other interest and sport playing的时刻没有发生改变
第二段But on the other hand(3)
The chart shows the percentage of time working adults spent the day on different activities in a particular country in 1985 and 2008